end 1:
she woke up the next morning, fairly refreshed and happy. while getting out of bed, she noticed that she had something clutched in her hand. looking down at it all the sense of foreboding returned. it was a piece of fabric, from a robe that sparkled like the sun, that someone had torn out ........
end 2:
she woke up feeling fairly refreshed and happy. she called Derek and atlast got him. He sounded relieved when he heard her voice. she didnt make any complaints regarding the neglect with which he had treated her for the past few days, she was just happy at having him back...infact having her life back the way it was before the dream came. they planned to meet at the beach in the evening.
that day she worked with a pleasurable excitement and kept glancing at the time, urging it to go fast. atlast evening came and she rushed off to the beach..
she shuddered slightly at the sight of the waves but then she caught sight of him and everything came back.
she stood looking at the sea, wondering about the stories it could reveal but chose not to... he had asked her to marry him and she had said yes.....as she stood nestled in these happy thoughts something struck her feet. she looked down and all the sense of foreboding returned. it was a small golden key....maybe the waves had brought it back.....she bent, picked it up and threw it to the sea with all her might.....silently urging the waves not to return it atleast this time.......
as she turned to go she saw someone striding towards her. he asked in an apologetic tone" have you seen a key somewhere along this part of the shore? i had lost it here ..."..................
without batting an eyelash she replied" no i dint, but i wasnt paying attention ... was it something important?" ...." yes.... very.." he said with a disheartened look ......" the waves must have taken it..." she said and went away thinking to herself" so much for dreams".
5 comments:
liked the story and end 2.. :-) matches ur style.. btw a suggestion.. writing in sentence case would increase the readability considerably..
agree with jfx on that... u need to do bit of formating i guess... and justify the paragraphs..
hey..good one.
u've given emphasis to detail barring a few places here and there which are vague. but it's ok
especially i liked the part where u've described the interior of the room of sculpted God.
@jfx
i dint understand what u meant by sentence case
@dsk
how can i do the formatting and all that. i cudnt find the option.
@sherin
thankyou. i saw the room in detail in my dream and the picture remained vivid in memory.
This is sentence case. To make it more clear, I've added one more sentence. and this sentence does not have sentence case. hope you got it (none of the comments are in sentence case :-)
there are buttons in compose tab (near 'edit html' in case u r using tht) while you are writing the blog..
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